Advice: cover letters

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I love my job. I get to deal with ~400 users with all sorts of random nutty problems to fix. Problem is, as usual, pay is <perfect.

So I see this ad for a job in the paper. Description looks easy, requirements no problem... compensation: starting at double my current pay.

How do you make a kickass cover letter, that will make the recruiter really want to read your resume? Given the base salary of this job, they will probably be receiving somewhere in the neighbourhood of.... eh, 3000 applications. I want my e-mail cover letter to really stand out; containing all the relevant info, but without taking them more than a minute to read.

Any advice would be greatly appreciated. I'm hoping someone here has hired someone somewhere at some point, somehow someday someplace sum(A4:D9).
 
just tell them your a 74 elvaan war 45 whm and are Bastok 7-1 • ZM14 • CoP 2-5(getting this from your sig) if whoever is hiring isnt automaticlly impressed by this, then they are obviously incompatant at their job.
 
When I was on unemployment, I to this resume professional. Most of what she said seemed like BS, ranting about never using resume programs and always using Microsoft Word, and similar nonissues, but she did have a few good ideas. The one that relates to your coverletter question seems pretty clever to me. It was a two column chart. On the left she listed all the things the employer would want in an employee, most of which came right from said job posting. On the right she had a small blurb showing how those qualifications were met. For example:

Business wants |You have
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4 year degree in appropriate field | BA in XXXX at XXXX

It's not the route I took when I sent out my resume. I did the standard one page essay style cover letter like everyone else, and it hasn't gotten me a job. There's gotta be something good about standing out from a stack of generic BS papers that talk a lot and say nothing. Of course, you'd have to neaten it up, I can't seem to get anything close to looking presentable in this format, but you get the idea
 
CmdrFly said:
So I see this ad for a job in the paper. Description looks easy, requirements no problem... compensation: starting at double my current pay.
It's hard to make a recommendation without knowing exactly what it is you are doing now, and what you will be doing.

I will assume that the new job is paying in the 60k-70K range. The old saying that if it sounds too good to be true, then it is, holds true. IT people are rarely overpaid anymore as they are more than dime a dozen. High salary could be an indicator of an incomplete job description or requirements. Finding out what exactly they are looking for without to annoy them would imho be the first step.

Then you should think about how serious you really are about switching jobs. If you are dead serious, I would spend like $200 to have a professional write me a cover letter (like the folks at monster.com).

Standing out is the biggest challenge for some. If you have a run off the mill education I wouldn't mention anything about it in the cover letter. If you do have certifications that are worth something, like EMC, Oracle, CISSP, I would definitely bring that up. MSSD, MSCE, A+, etc are almost expected today, unsure if mentioning those would do any good, if it were my cover letter I wouldn't point them out as they are listed in the resume anyway.

Mention special skills, such as language, or Fortran90, or anything that is not found in many other employees.

Concentrate on what you have done to better the company you are currently work for. Be specific, but brief, (i.e.: I developed procedures that resulted in a 8% increase in completed CS requests per hour.).

How have you positivly affected the bottom line of the company you work for?

If you haven't done anything like that, then it will be an uphill battle.
I would suggest to point out specific skills that you believe will be beneficial in either motivating your team, or leading your team to higher efficiency. In this case you absolutely will have to do some research on the company you are applying for. You will need to find out how they are doing financially, what it is they are struggling with, and specifically address those issues in your cover letter.

Those kind of things catch a recruiters attention.

This is often easier said than done. If it is a large company, then there will be plenty of info available online. If it is a smaller local or regional business, then you will have to do some digging, perhaps even place a CS call to them and see what happens. Of course they won't have a ticket, just play dumb (uhm, I have submitted that last week, why isn't this done, etc etc, social engineering basically) and see where it goes from there. You want to get a feel for how their place is run. Call them right at start of business, call them during the lunch hour, call them a minute before end of business. Don't use your home phone of course. Find out whether there is a backlog of tickets, etc etc. What you are looking for is details on a weakness.

Writing on your cover letter that you have ideas on how to reduce their CS ticket backlog from 520 tickets to the industry standard of 120 tickets, or the average response time for 49 minutes to the industry average of 24 minutes will get you major attention points (all numbers made up). Of course you better have some valid ideas, whether they are feasible in their operation is irrelevant as long as they are not outlandish.

Any business has room for improvement. If you can't find anything wrong with the business, then that is worth mentioning as well and playing the "I believe that being part of a business that for the 5th year posted operating profits in excess of 27% combines my personal and professional interests and ambitions.". Give the recruiter anything that indicates that you have done some research on the company.

Good luck.
 
Skaw said:
"Hire me, bitches"
Zing! WE HAVE A WINNER

I like your suggestion Pompidou. They actually asked for that in the ad, "please clearly state how you meet the following requirements". However, those 'requirements' are:
1. Canadian citizen
2. Class 5 driver's license (i.e. beyond the graduated program)
3. Fluent in English


Now for Sculli. I must say, you knowledge of me is eery. Is that you hiding under my desk? You've been down there for 2 months man... go eat something.

Sculli said:
It's hard to make a recommendation without knowing exactly what it is you are doing now, and what you will be doing.
Second-tier desktop tech, middle of the food chain. If users have a problem, they call our internal helpdesk (conveniently 11,000km away). If the helpdesk can't resolve it, they drop a ticket in our queue. Problems range from as low as replacing cables to laser printer repairs, and a whole lot of backup/restores (we actually had to restore an entire Exchange drive once - the president of one department accidentally deleted an e-mail).

Sculli said:
IT people are rarely overpaid anymore as they are more than dime a dozen.
True. However, this is a government job. They love to spend money. BC gov't pays ~$23/hr (cdn) for first-tier techs; for the same position, our company pays $11/hr (I think, I skipped first-tier when I got hired). That's not due to company size either; that's an average industry wage for newbie techs.

Sculli said:
If you do have certifications that are worth something, like EMC, Oracle, CISSP, I would definitely bring that up. MSSD, MSCE, A+, etc are almost expected today, unsure if mentioning those would do any good, if it were my cover letter I wouldn't point them out as they are listed in the resume anyway.
I'm on the other side of this fence. The recruiters who receive the applications are run-of-the-mill HR folks, are they not? Most of them don't know that MSCE / A+ are "standard" certs, and just mentioning them may hold a "wow" factor.

The only thing I want to do right here, is get them to read my resume. I have been told by our own HR department that if there's a lot of applications to one position, they skim through the cover letter. From that alone, they decide if the resume is worth reading or not.

One way or another, I actually don't have any tickets. I went to an amazing school, excellent course outline & teachers, well known and usually held in high standards around western Canada. The course covered (painstakingly) all 8 levels of the CCNP cert and more than enough topics to land MSCE, in a relatively short span of 10 months. However, I'm not really sure how to tell them that I have the qualifications of a CCNP / MCSE tech, when I actually don't have the cert.

Sculli said:
Concentrate on what you have done to better the company you are currently work for. Be specific, but brief, (i.e.: I developed procedures that resulted in a 8% increase in completed CS requests per hour.).

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In this case you absolutely will have to do some research on the company you are applying for. You will need to find out how they are doing financially, what it is they are struggling with, and specifically address those issues in your cover letter.
Excellent thoughts, thank you. This 'company', however, is the Royal Canadian Mounted Police. Finding out details like that will either be impossible by legal means, or easier than taking a dump after coffee & quesadillas.


Sculli said:
If it is a smaller local or regional business, then you will have to do some digging, perhaps even place a CS call to them and see what happens. Of course they won't have a ticket, just play dumb (uhm, I have submitted that last week, why isn't this done, etc etc, social engineering basically) and see where it goes from there. You want to get a feel for how their place is run. Call them right at start of business, call them during the lunch hour, call them a minute before end of business.
You crafty son of a bitch. Unfortunately, this is a new department being set up for the British Columbia RCMP branch. There currently is no IT crew to call and place a ticket with.


All in all, you guys have some excellent suggestions on how a guy should pimp himself out. Danka shein... if I can pull this off, I'll post a screenie of the end result.
 
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