Poem I wrote 8th hour...I'm feeling morbid

[Ronith]

Walking - Silent

I walk, silently alone on that dark road.
Not anything in sight, nothing but night.
Black, raining, and now sadness.
What's gone so wrong?

I hear something, someone from behind me.
Would be of no use to look now.
Is being alone so bad?

Poison...pulsing thru my veins.
Parasites, plaguing me every second.
Death, searching... he found me.
Alone walking on this dark rainy night.
One touch of his hand...I join his ranks.
Liberated from that old world... I am now in peace.

~~~~~~~~~~End~~~~~~~~~~~~

I've been getting treated like shit from my old friends, a week ago we were best of friends, and now they spit on me, treat me like shit and nothing better than an invalid dog...

 

[livvy]

/comfort

Sorry ur having friend issues

I did enjoy your poem, kinda sad, but good form

 

[Stirce]

maybe they were never really your friends then.

 

[Astraea]

I like it. I think it is pretty. It is the people you care for the most that hurt you the most. ; ;

 

[Answa~]

I like it. I think it is pretty. It is the people you care for the most that hurt you the most. ; ;

I concur.

Good poem, I wish you the best.

 

[Lokkin]

I liked it, I just finished an art essay and I'm feeling in a critical mood, I felt you expressed a lot of sadness in the poem, I know it's kinda obvious but, ya know, yeah, good poem. *three thumbs up*

Sorry to hear about the friend problems, not a lot you can do about it, find other friends, friends more worthy of your time and talent.

Lok

 

[Ronith]

thx for the feedback guys, that's the 1st poem I've ever written... glad it turned out to be a good one, yea my friends are still treating me like shit, my old best friend will walk by me while at work and give me a go-to-hell look... for no reason... I hate High School, and everyone who says you'll miss it, FUCK OFF...(no offense <.<; )

 

[Excim]

thx for the feedback guys, that's the 1st poem I've ever written... glad it turned out to be a good one, yea my friends are still treating me like shit, my old best friend will walk by me while at work and give me a go-to-hell look... for no reason... I hate High School, and everyone who says you'll miss it, FUCK OFF...(no offense <.<; )

I don't miss high school. I do miss being 15 or 16 years old sometimes though. No bills... ahhhhhh...

 

[Ronith]

I don't miss high school. I do miss being 15 or 16 years old sometimes though. No bills... ahhhhhh...

lol, I'm not looking forward to that though bills... oh yay...

*calls mom* hey... about that electric bill,