Need an opinion

During the police scene where it pans across all of them the video locks up. The music keeps playing, but the video just freezes.
 
Was wondering lol.

Dunno, the animation's not very smooth and it makes it rather difficult to watch imo.
 
well ,i wanted to make it slower, but by the time i realized i had it going to fast it was outa sync when is lowed down the frame rate
 
I watch the newgrounds top 5 everyday and sometimes rate it if im up for it. I'll try to be fair with you, the style is kinda blah. The graphics could use a little work maybe some cleaning up. The zoom in on the first part was a bit long with no explination to why we are looking at the roof. The building dureing the zoom looked like a mixture of the line tool and the brush tool which didn't bother me much but I'd suggest keeping with the brush if you want to make a style.

I really couldn't find out what was happening in it, all I know was there was some army the pres or whoever was shot or somthing. (The text effect that was used was kinda iffy and made it less seroius). A guy was behind a building for who knows what reason watching the soldiers. A guy who seemed like he was commanding the soldiers was stand on a roof top or something watching. Then the police came in and I'm not sure what they had to do with anything which confused me. Since you froze on the police I noticed that their pupils were off and not cenetered, you can always use the allign tool to get them to match eyes.

Overall things were a bit choppy and fast but heading in the right direction. Since the song was more of a seroius song you should try for some detail and maybe build a story. Thats all I got to say. Not trying to be harsh, I suck at animating so I can't say much.
 
no offense takin i suck at drawing, i didnt use the line tool at all in this movie, there really isnt a story line accept one side bombed another side and it keeps goin back and forth, and the guy on the balcony will tie in later on in the movie :) but really its kinda randomly put together, if i was more dedicated to this and was capable of working on it at my house it would look a hell of a lot better and i would take my time but i only get 40-80 minutes every other day to work on it, im just trying to get it out before the end of my schoo lyear (only 5 more classes left to finish it) and i still have 2000 frames to animate as of today :(
 
eh, i'm not much for the art style, but oraga pretty much summed everything up for me. Though, there was one part, that was kinda confussing at first (the whole land to air missle thing with the floating see through red box). It wasn't till 'locked on' that i even realized that it was trying to track it :P The rest was ummm ok? I liked the music, though there is a way in flash to make it auto sync with how your setting up your frames, that way regardless of computer speed it will always line up correctly (if you don't do that, then it can sync wrong just varying computers >.> ) I can't recall the exact option, but it's in properties when you have the sound file selected in the time line and it's a drop down menu. Also, I'm not sure you realized this or anything, but you can use photoshop or any programs and such to make some of the symbols. For instance, the Lock On target thing, you can just simply import it ^^; Personally, i can't draw in Flash for crap, but I do like scanning and pulling in outside objects into the scene. Makes it much easier for me ^^; (larger library though >.>)

Other than that, think about putting a black border around the edges, it doesn't have to be large, but in several of your scenes, your objects don't hit the end of the workspace leaving anything that 'is' past it, visible. You can really see it when the guy is in the street corner and the soldiers are marching down the street. Look at the bottom of the buildings ^^; but a black boarder, even maybe 5 pixels in width around the edges during the whole, could be a quick fix.
 
thank you for yoru advice, im not gonna be able to finish it any ways, but im gonna try to put a border on it to make it look better, i dont really do much flash, i wana learn more actionscript!
 
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