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I'll wait for some others to also confirm lol ^^;

Chapter 3 is the uppers...remember constructive criticism please =P


thanks
 
I was always going to name my LS if I ever made one Saviorself, JavelinFangz, or Spartibus.

If you know me then you'll know they are all song names lol.

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After the Besieged chapter I dunno what to do lol. I have never done Campaign having quit before it came out.

I wanna see a battle involving some land gods or something (ie: Vrtra, Tiamat, Jorm, Fafnir)

I think that would be interesting to read, seeing how the great Dragoon Samurai and his trusty wyvern Oboro would handle this challenge along with his merry band of Vana Dielians (sp)

Keep up the good work.
 
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Seems good, I liked reading it, keep at it!

Race: tarutaru ftw <3
Job: thief
Sub: nin
weapon: dagger
 
Luzaf kicks your butt Iso. D:<
 
I wish this was a TV show of some sort, it would be awesome. Good work HIt :)
 
Nice work Hit!

BTW> Jerkface is the Galka with the Wolverine hair, not that it matters cause you will stick me in AF hat :P

This is awesome.
 
Fantastic work so far Hitaru, great detail which helps flush out characters' personalities and makes it much easier to picture what's going on atm. The battle is incredibly detailed and not drawn out at all, it keeps a decent pace /thumbs up. Like previously said, good story ideas could revolve around Gods, or ToAU or CoP or WoTG, HNMs or simply a day at the bar, theres plenty of options in the world of Vanadi'el.
I took the freedom o doing some sketches, you know like those books that have a pic or two every chapter just to help out with story placement and entertaiment.

PS. Tim and i are actually good frds, and used to duo alot with another frd we had, but our frd quit and only Tim and i remain. Im sure Tim wouldnt oppose to the idea of us making a Tanking duo if possible (not that he would need the help anyways -.-;). Always thought PLD+NIN team would be kind of cool :P
 
LS Name - Were Suppositories!

nevermind..
 
Thanks Aristarc, i'll take all that into consideration ^^

Also, Chapter 4 is prolly a bit delayed due to having to paint the whole decking at the back of the house which went from 2pm - 9pm and it's still not finished, It's almost done, just a little left...which of course other people will do as i need to go to school. tomorrow i have the teacher of death, so i'll try writing a chapter in his class.

It all depends XD

but yes, right now Chapter 4: Besieged complete is on hold ; ;
 
can't wait til chapter 4! :D
 
Each Chapter is better then the last.

I think it would be interesting that after besieged to have a few different story arcs, such as Ungimp Tim, Adventures in Promies, Escape from Dynamis, The Search for the Avatars, but to have an underlining enemy through each story that you slowly learn more and more about.
What I have in my mind is an enemy that isn’t represented in the game so it gives you more freedom about how you want to put them together.

I imagine it being something like a mime, not the French kind, but the type in other FF games. Where you could have like 1 or 2 members run into them here and there and each time they fight one of the mimes it learns all or some of that person’s abilities, to were they become stronger each time they meet leading up to one hell of an epic battle in the end :). (I guess that is kind of like the Arch Angel battle)
Also could have someone be replaced by a mime and they could have their own little side adventure trying to get back to the group. Or have a discovery that the three Nations have hidden/classified the information about the group of mimes (that’s why no one has seen or heard of them).
 
it's not a bad read, but I think there needs to be more exposition, I've currently read the first and on the second chapter atm but the plot seems a bit rushed and the characters are in their "primes" which would imply a close end.
 
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it's not a bad read, but I think there needs to be more exposition, I've currently read the first and on the second chapter atm but the plot seems a bit rushed and the characters are in their "primes" which would imply a close end.
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It's not gonna end soon =P trust me ^^, The plot is rushed because it's besieged and i don't wanna drag that out for too long coz fighting things is all you really do in besieged with no real reward other than keeping Sanction. But i thank you for your feed back Khi, now join the story as a linkshell member or i'll shoot you
 
race: elf

job: blue mage

sub: ninja

weapon/armor: scimitar/blue af

have a question about personalities as I read the one and a half chapter you did them well did you get descriptions from the persons themselves or did you just analyze them and improvised, i liked it either way

only linhjah can make her own ws and it'd be effective

kinda reading some important stuff and I'm using my bro's comp so sorry for delayed responses
 
Chapter 5 is uppers =P tell me what's ya think ^^;

Sorry about the delay with this chapter, school is currently kicking my ass. but guess what! i might be able to use this in one of my assignments! and i got my English teacher reading it XD

edit: also notice how i post at around 1-2amish then complain in the come say hi at work thread about how i'm late to class...there totally isn't a connection there...no sirry
 
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