Our story Discussion

I was wondering if i could look like this in the story.
OurStory.jpg

of course this isn't really an actual game setup (shield-wise), i just like how the White, Gold, and Silver mix together.
 
Chapter 2 is up!

please give me constructive criticism as it will help me improve my writing and blah blah as well as give you the readers a more enjoyable experience.

Chapter 2 is a alot longer than chapter 1, please let me know whether they should be shorter chapters or if they can vary.

Thanks ^^
 
Chapter 2 is good Hitaru...! Just could use a little more Solan(humeform) lol.

Also is it cool if this be my gear.
Spoiler:
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Basically, Wyvern Helm, Hauby, rest Usukane ^^; with Amanomurakumo and Valkyrie's Fork
 
Great piece for CH.2 ~

And o.O;;; at Kay...

And I didn't find it to be dragged out, I found it quite the opposite. I like where you ended it though.
 
Thanks you guys, I got to where Linhjah needed to do something and was like fuck, What kind of weapon skill can i use? that bit hurt my head XD.

Solan you're coming up, and yes you can have your gear like that =P ^^
 
Can I continue absolutely slaughtering everything? Cripes.
 
Obviously you can't when I get there :wink:
 
Chapter 2 sounds great! Fight scenes were well written, I could imagine the fights in my head and wish I was a better drawer so to make this story into a graphic novel :).
 
Thank you ^^ appreciate all the positive feed back!

Also Kale, I wrote your character out properly XD
 
Hitaru what you are doing here is great, I once considered doing a similar venture but writing seems to have gone out of me now. Keep the chapters coming you are pleasing many here I can tell. :)
 
Thanks for the kind words jeska.

This just in! we need a Linkshell name, that way some more people can join and help on the rare occasion or two!

I currently have nothing in my head for a name so help me out with that one guys ^^;
 
Where can I find the story? I wanna read :D

No worries found it, very good indeed! :D
 
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Oath? Like the shell I had created to help others?

Other then that here are a few.

Embrace
Crescent(SP?)
lilRascals (lol)
Disfunctional
KillinMoogles
RubOnRubOff(or waxonwaxoff)
 
Great Idea to let others in! :D

I always liked the shell name Armada
Others I got are ProphetsofRage, FallenSoldiers(or TheFallenSoldiers), Placebo, WisePerformers (All kinda Eh... I could think of better but my brain is broken tonight)
 
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